tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6320269312957801390.post2994418639651337394..comments2024-03-28T05:59:52.454-07:00Comments on TalkToYoUniverse: Re-envisioning a scene without rewriting it (originally appeared at The Other Side of the Story)Juliette Wadehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02879627074920760712noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6320269312957801390.post-55594898788070315062011-05-26T05:48:25.114-07:002011-05-26T05:48:25.114-07:00PW, I'm so glad you liked the post. Thanks for...PW, I'm so glad you liked the post. Thanks for your comment!Juliette Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02879627074920760712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6320269312957801390.post-35754525147418243232011-05-26T05:41:17.201-07:002011-05-26T05:41:17.201-07:00Good post. I find it incredibly powerful when you&...Good post. I find it incredibly powerful when you're revising that you can alter a scene entirely by adding or removing a few words in the right place. Just like a painter, add a line in the right spot and the pice can come to life.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01046515540256155412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6320269312957801390.post-53179579502366464832011-05-10T20:03:04.511-07:002011-05-10T20:03:04.511-07:00Cool, Jaleh! Glad you found it helpful. I'm ve...Cool, Jaleh! Glad you found it helpful. I'm very glad you enjoy my analysis posts. I'll try to get one going as soon as things let up a little...but I'll let you resubmit when you're ready.Juliette Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02879627074920760712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6320269312957801390.post-16782403599201983152011-05-10T05:59:36.505-07:002011-05-10T05:59:36.505-07:00This is exactly what I needed to see after reading...This is exactly what I needed to see after reading the critiques from my crit group on the opening scene of my zombie story. The voice wasn't coming through (the one some of them remembered and loved from my original version) and the interaction with a walk-on character came across as trivial rather than a teaser for later.<br /><br />This helps explain why I was getting those comments and what to look at for fixing it without rewriting it all over again, especially since I like how the scene happens. The original was just the MC reflecting, with no scene.<br /><br />By the way, this is the same scene I'd submitted for Wednesday Worldbuilding. Since I'm going to be refining it, you can take it off the waiting list. When it's in better shape, I'll resubmit. And I completely understand why you're cutting back on the frequency of critiquing the submissions. They do take a long time. But I'm happy to study the samples whenever you do post them. You do an amazing job.Jaleh Dhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04942272578488986874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6320269312957801390.post-17020877846865568072011-05-09T22:02:51.020-07:002011-05-09T22:02:51.020-07:00Trisha, thanks for commenting. This kind of stuff ...Trisha, thanks for commenting. This kind of stuff can be really tricky, but I agree you don't want people just talking for the sake of talking. This is why I'm such a stickler for going through chronologically and tracking the mental states of the characters.Juliette Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02879627074920760712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6320269312957801390.post-91599699583074394732011-05-09T21:51:44.838-07:002011-05-09T21:51:44.838-07:00I'm having some similar problems with my Sundo...I'm having some similar problems with my Sundown revisions - hence why I had to take a step back for a while. ;) Firstly I'm trying to figure out what I want out of each scene - what I want my characters to get out of their conversations. Sometimes they're just talking for the sake of talking, and I'm trying to modify those scenes. But sometimes I modify them and they still aren't what I really want.Trishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.com